贵公司官网公司简介 最好修改下
一般来说，官网要尽可能显得严肃庄重，所以句式要完整，简洁以及合理。 我将可能会引起专业买家对外贸及相关人员专业性质疑的句子圈起来并作适当调整。希望对贵司有用。
原文如下：
ABOUT XINYAO
1（Guangzhou Xinyao Electronic Co, Ltd is a professional manufacturer of LCD/LED monitors TV. One of the pioneers-factories in China making LCD TV MONITOR.）
2(Founded in 2004, located in Panyu District Guangzhou City China. Own over 6000 square meters factory building equipped with advanced testing and experimental facilities.) 3（We built in 3 Pro uct assembly lines, 23 set mould injection machine, 8 CNC lathe Machine etc.） 4（Xinyao is a integrated high tech enterprise which includes the reseach and development, production sal s and trade Over 15 years experienced, our products are widely recognized and trusted by users and can meet continuously changing economic and social needs.）
5(Our company enjoys a good reputation among our customers. ) 6（Xinyao has partnered with clients and agen s in all over the world for more than 46 countries and regions in the world, such as Bangladesh, India, Pakistan, Malaysia, Saudi Arabia, UAE, South Africa, Eg pt, Turkey, Unites States, etc）
7（We warmly welcome customers, business associations and friends from all p rts of world to contact us and seek cooperation for mutual benefits。）
建议修改如下：
1 Guangzhou Xinyao Electronic Co, Ltd is a one of professional pioneering manufacturers of LCD/LED monitors TV in China.（能简单，就不要重复）
2 Founded in 2004, Xinyao is euipped with advanced testing and experimental facilities within over 6000 square meters plant in Guangzhou, China. (一般都只到市，当然你也可以把什么区加进去，哪个市不用刻意用city强调）
3 There are 3 Pro uct assembly lines, 23 set mould injection machine, 8 CNC lathe Machine and other related euipments.(英文介绍多用被动句，少用主语）
4 With over 15 year experience, the company is widely recognized and trusted as an integrated high tech enterprise by users. In this case, economic and social requirements can be continuously fulfilled.
5 删除 4 中已认可。
6 Xinyao has partnered with clients and agents in more than 46 countries and regions including as Bangladesh, India, Pakistan, Malaysia, Saudi Arabia, UAE, South Africa, Eg pt, Turkey, Unites States, etc.( 尽可能少用词把话说清楚）
7 Welcome to contact us and have win-win cooperation!
你们工厂没翻译吗? 那现在有外贸业务员吗？
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