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2011-3-11 10:57 sandylover
如何写好一封开发信?

做外贸已经两年了,但是对于怎么写好一封好的开发信,一直还在摸索中。总感觉每次听的看的案例都不一样,所以写的开发信也一直每个准,想请前辈没多给些宝贵的意见。
   我们是一家生产称重传感器(用于电子秤以及相关测试设备)和电阻应变计的专业生产商,我们产品需要高精密的生产工序,产品精度越高越好。目前在行业中,属于中高端水平。
    附上我自己写的开发信,请各位前辈多多指教,谢谢!

Dear Sir/Madam,

Greetings!

Supply Best Quality and Lowest Price Load Cells & Strain Gauges!

This is Sandy, sales manager from XIAMEN LOADCELL TECHNOLOGY CO., LTD ([url]www.lctxm.com[/url])in Xiamen China. We write to you see if there is an opportunity for us to cooperate with you, as your supplier of load cells or strain gauges.

We own your name to alibaba. To know you are a professional manufacturer of instructor and want to look for a partner of load cells. Kindly allow us to briefly introduce ourselves,we are a manufacturer of load cells and strain gauges for ten years,all of our technician are talent craft with the experienced in these areas.At present,our production capacity has reach 40 million of strain gauges and 5 million of load cells per year,part of load cells are OIML R60 approval,and the material of gauges is import from Germany.

Enclosed is a catalogue of our main products; please review it. If you are interested in any item from it, please tell me. I sincerely hope we can cooperate with your company in the future. If there is any question or inquiry, please feel free to contact us at any time.Or you can visit our English website of    [url]http://www.lctxm.com/english/aboutus.aspx.[/url]

I look forward to your future e-mail and fruitful cooperation with you in the future.

Thanks & Best regards,

Sandy
Sales Manager

Xiamen Loadcell Technology Co., Ltd.
Tel: 86-592-7234588
Fax: 86-592-7234599
E-mail:  [email]lct28@lctxm.com[/email]
Website: [url]http://www.lctxm.com[/url]
Add: 5FL, No. 20, HuLi Park, TongAn Industry Central Zone, Xiamen, China. 361100.

2011-3-12 13:27 ching123
我没什么经验,入行以来一直写开发信,你的是不是貌似有点长了啊?呵呵...

2011-3-13 17:52 快乐宝贝——青
看了你的开发信,和我们书本上讲的形式差不多,很完整,也很具体。
但就我个人观点,觉得好长,那别人看的时候会不会也有这种感觉呢。

2011-3-14 11:21 Lunaseathree
回复 #2 ching123 的帖子

确实长 我看了几句就看不下去了

2011-3-14 11:31 sandylover
感谢各位的宝贵建议,我会稍做修改,尽量缩短邮件长度,简洁明了。

2011-6-19 15:46 olivin
学习了. 不过有点长..

2011-6-23 20:43 dubaikm
都说别人的信太长了,那有没有比这好的呢?发出来大家一起分享啊、

2011-6-25 09:25 afai
过于生硬,这样的信函客户容易当作垃圾邮件。刚开始找一个与客户的记忆点,问下有什么需求计划;直接说明做哪种产品得。这样可能会比较吸引客户。

2011-6-26 10:17 789
Dear Sir or Madam,
Good day to you.
We are manufacturer and exporter of XXXX with patetn register together with the relative certificates such asXXXXXXXXX.
Our products are manily for physiotherapy,warming and promotional gift without heating or electric.
Information of our products can be found at our busines website, welcome to have  a look and pick up your interested items.
Anything we could do for you,pls contact us directly.It be our great pleasure.
Look forward to hearing from you.
Thanks and best regards!

2011-6-26 10:19 789
开发信中一般不要出现公司网站,不然很容易被列入垃圾邮件中。还有不要太长,一般三句话来概括就好了。据说老外浏览一封邮件的时间只有七八秒。

2011-6-27 22:50 zlj-0913
太长了。:handshake

2011-6-28 14:52 sandylover
回复 #10 789 的帖子

为什么不能有网址呢?有的人说要网址。。。
真是纠结

2015-1-9 13:44 小萱萱
好像是有网址的会被屏蔽或者自动加入垃圾邮件,可是不给他网址他怎么看产品呢?

2015-1-20 14:11 3505
学习中,我也是很纳闷呢,如果不给他们网址,那可以给附件么,附上公司的产品目录?

2015-2-2 22:28 男神吴亚楠
回复 #1 sandylover 的帖子

看上去挺好的

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