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alicewang1231
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这开发信发了小半个月,一封回复都没有,请各位指正

我的开发信:

Glad to know you from your professional website, you are one of the leading companys in logistics.

This is Alice from XXX Forwarding Co.,Ltd. We have been in freight forwarder business for almost 20 years.
I am confident that we are capable to meet your  forwarder standard, while cutting your cost and time by at least 20%.
Please be sure, we are also very capable to insurance, customs clearance, warehousing and stock control with your drawings.

Our advantages:

◆The shipping line support
We has estabalished long term and reliable relationship with many high-class carriers .
We and our appointed agents have signed ocean freight rate service contract with main Vessel Ocean Common Carrrier/V.O.C.C. in various tradelane.
Especially,we have signed rate service contract in Far East/USA tradelane with more than 13 V.O.C.C.,such as APL,CMA,Maresk,PIL….ect.

◆Perfect service network
We built the whole network as the North America, Europe and Southern Asia. with the skillful operation , patient customer service make the shipments safety .

◆Tracking system
Besides advanced 24h cargo tracking, it also has the main person here who in charge of tracking your each shipment closely and report you any update information in due time.

◆Excellent service
1.Air & Sea Freight Consolidation.
2.Customs Brokers,Commodity inspection,Marine Insurance
3.Warehousing & Distribution
4.Professional transport of dangerous goods, chemicals, flat bottom containers, open top containers, heavy machinery, fireworks,special container,bulk cargo and so on
5.Air Freight(packaging,QC,fumigating,commodity inspection,pallet and so on)

I am very confident that when you work with us, you will have satisfaction.

For more information, pls feel free to visit our website: xxx

If you have any new inquiry or bookings, pls feel free to tell us.

Best regards,

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alicewang1231
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是不是太长了,国外觉得看起来费劲

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whatsship
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老外喜欢看短文,而且大多数只看重点,EMAIL内容开头应该就要将你司的价格优势,最好以举例子的方式优先说明,让老外一睹为快,后续介绍你公司的信息。
换位思考一下,客户本身有合作的物流渠道,还有每天收到这么多同类的开发信,最好先将你司的价格优势摆到客户面前,让客户去比较,他有兴趣的话,自然会回复你,做后续了解。

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alicewang1231
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回复 #3 whatsship 的帖子

谢谢你,看来我的开发信要重新写了,感觉他们压根就没有看过我的开发信,连No thanks都木得

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原帖由 alicewang1231 于 2018-9-4 09:41 发表
谢谢你,看来我的开发信要重新写了,感觉他们压根就没有看过我的开发信,连No thanks都木得

[attach]412155[/attach]比No thanks强一点点吗???

[ 本帖最后由 去了月球 于 2018-9-7 18:54 编辑 ]



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marktong (We Stone )
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太撑了哎哎

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alicewang1231
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回复 #5 去了月球 的帖子

噗,至少对方看了你的开发信

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感觉是像看简历,觉得必须短,而且有吸引力,就像处对象,一来一会才有感情啊。怕给人吓跑了

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alicewang1231
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终于有一封回复了:
Thanks for your information.

I’ll let you know, when ill have any new inquiries

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marktong (We Stone )
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开头太累赘!!

Glad to learn you from Friend, you are one of the leading companys in logistics.

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alicewang1231
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回复 #10 marktong 的帖子

多谢指正,现在发的开发信精简到10行,可感觉回复率还是不太高

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